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Pretty liiiights...

Yes you did a fantastic job with the particle effects, I'd have to say it is darn near perfect. But unfortunately there isn't much merit to just a simple animation of fireworks. I'd like to see something with a bit more content from you next time. :]

Quality

The saving grace of this will be the quantity of them together, without that there is not much merit.
The dbz was probably the most amusing.
But my advice is to focus on the quality, thing will not get blammed that way.

AwesomeRangersPlus responds:

yea some of our flash comics we just been focusing on quality

Weeeell

As it's been said for a first flash I think it is well done. Of course that doesn't automatically make it "OMG AMAZING" but compared to the stupid things people usually make without putting effort into anything you are doing well.
Now then, there is nothing wrong with having no sound, I know how hard it is to get it myself.
I would advise practicing on frame by frame animation, it takes alot more work but of course it comes out better.
And you are relying a little too heavily and internet "funny" slang phrases like "ZOMG PL0X" and all that. It can be amusing when used cleverly but you are on the verge of excess/annoying.
It was still a bit amusing, as someone who once played runescape. So I'd say you have a general idea of what you are doing and are already at a certain level of qualiy on your very first flash. Keep at it.

TimGoesToTheGym responds:

Thanks for a great review, ill keep your tips in mind!

poor execution

The drawing/animation quality was extremely sub-par. If it wasn't for the music I would have had no idea half the time that it was a caramelidansen flash.

I'd say the shining point in the flash was the voice sychronization to the "oooaaa" but really that is the only thing worth any sort of merit in this.

Nintendo-pie responds:

Ok, I'll take that into account in the future. The drawing's not great because I, myself , am not great with a mouse and that's all I had. This was also a slightly experimental flash to check out the ins and outs of flash animation.

sound synch messes it up

I can't say it is bad or good because the synch of the sound really robs from the quality this could have. It didn't seem that bad in the beginning but as the sound gets more and more off it just becomes completely confusing.

I would speed up the frame rate to keep up with the sound, otherwise it comes out looking bad.

hehe

You have talent in animation and drawing, and this was amusing- but I'm sure you could do better than this.

decent

They had amusing expressions the whole "PLAN!" bubble thing made me laugh. I'd say good job, but bare in mind there is still alot of room for improvement.

not alot to say

The animation was good but... there was just so little to get into. I'd guess the intention was for it to be short, but next time make an actual neato story and I'm sure it'll be far more enjoyable.

Can't say I enjoyed it

Where can I start, in a "comic" animation like this that doesn't have an intense amount of animation you really need to focus on the drawing and art quality since most of it is tweens. But all your drawings are badly drawn "anime" stuff. There is little merit in the animation or art, though the flow isn't badly done. The way words come up and some of the visual effects are good (not well drawn but good angles and such)
The voice acting was good, which is probably the only other really positive thing I can say about this.
The characters and story were as bland as rice. I found myself hating the characters as the story went on. They are all very lifeless and any personality is so artificially implanted onto them it feels unatural.
I'd say work on your writing and drawing skills, because you already have a good sense for flash dynamics (besides what feels like an overabundance of tweens).

omegafinal responds:

That's mainly the fault of the tracing from Illustrator CS3, which I'm still practicing on using (also to judge on how clean my inking is). Also using raster images like .PNGs were inflating the file size. The characters I can defend, saying that I want to have some kind of evolution for them up to the end, so by that time, they won't be bland.

Well done

Decent animation and artwork, yes it suffers a tad from no "dynamic" sound but as someone who isn't a pro with sound effects myself I know how it is and I still think you did a good job. :]

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